I like how you've specifically stated where abouts the clothing your model will wear is from. This means that for all females that shop in topshop will be interested in this magazine from the start because they will be intrigued as to what else is included. To improve, specifically connect your magazine to an artist in particular, rather than stating popular music, because this will also create attraction from fan bases.
I agree with what Natalie has said. Females will be drawn in by the on-trend clothing and will want to shop there. I also agree with Natalie's improvements because her suggested improvement would draw more of my target audience in. From Natalie's post I have learnt to be a bit more specific as it will help draw my target audience in and appeal to them more.
This is a great pitch which clearly shows your genre, audience and also the themes your going to follow. Using brands will also entice people to read into your magazine, causing it to be more popular. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine. I think you just need to add more detail to improve the pitch.
I agree with what Harry has said. Being specific in my pitch has helped me a lot to focus on things during the creation of my draft magazine. £3.00 is what is averagely paid for a magazine therefore if I want my magazine to be more expensive I need to improve my ideas.
Molly! I like how simple and creative your magazine seems to appear. The clean and organised layout will allow you to attract a wide range of audiences. It would be interesting to see what sort of articles that your magazine will feature. I would be willing to pay £3 for your magazine, although basing it on a around females may restrain you from connecting to a male audience. To improve try adding features that would appeal to both male and female readers.
I agree with Sanjay, the use of my simple and organised layout fit's my aim to create a simple magazine well and because it is simple people will be more intrigued by it. I also agree with Sanjay's criticism for another reason. Because my target audience is females, my magazine needs to be very appealing to females in order for it to sell.
I like how you have used pictures for each different word in your pitch, and how you have used examples of magazines for certain words, as i am interested in the genre of music your doing i would pay up to £4 for your magazine, id push it to £5 if exclusives i was interested in were in the magazine.
I like Emily's feedback because it seems like she is intrigued to see what my magazine will feature. This is perfect because she is apart of my target audience. I like the idea that she would be willing to pay £4-5 for my magazine. This is effective because I aim for my magazine to look simple yet expensive. From Emily's post I have learnt that I needed to add more artist which appeal to a wider audience in order to get her attention.
I like the colour scheme of your presentation and the fact that it is the first thing that I notice will most certainly also attract your chosen audience. Also, the photos that go along with your chosen words give me an insight into what you want to create for your magazine. I would pay £3.50 for your magazine. To improve, include a few music artists relating to your genre.
I like how you've specifically stated where abouts the clothing your model will wear is from. This means that for all females that shop in topshop will be interested in this magazine from the start because they will be intrigued as to what else is included. To improve, specifically connect your magazine to an artist in particular, rather than stating popular music, because this will also create attraction from fan bases.
ReplyDeleteI agree with what Natalie has said. Females will be drawn in by the on-trend clothing and will want to shop there. I also agree with Natalie's improvements because her suggested improvement would draw more of my target audience in.
DeleteFrom Natalie's post I have learnt to be a bit more specific as it will help draw my target audience in and appeal to them more.
This is a great pitch which clearly shows your genre, audience and also the themes your going to follow. Using brands will also entice people to read into your magazine, causing it to be more popular. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine.
ReplyDeleteI think you just need to add more detail to improve the pitch.
I agree with what Harry has said. Being specific in my pitch has helped me a lot to focus on things during the creation of my draft magazine. £3.00 is what is averagely paid for a magazine therefore if I want my magazine to be more expensive I need to improve my ideas.
DeleteMolly! I like how simple and creative your magazine seems to appear. The clean and organised layout will allow you to attract a wide range of audiences. It would be interesting to see what sort of articles that your magazine will feature.
ReplyDeleteI would be willing to pay £3 for your magazine, although basing it on a around females may restrain you from connecting to a male audience.
To improve try adding features that would appeal to both male and female readers.
I agree with Sanjay, the use of my simple and organised layout fit's my aim to create a simple magazine well and because it is simple people will be more intrigued by it. I also agree with Sanjay's criticism for another reason. Because my target audience is females, my magazine needs to be very appealing to females in order for it to sell.
DeleteI like how you have used pictures for each different word in your pitch, and how you have used examples of magazines for certain words, as i am interested in the genre of music your doing i would pay up to £4 for your magazine, id push it to £5 if exclusives i was interested in were in the magazine.
ReplyDeleteI like Emily's feedback because it seems like she is intrigued to see what my magazine will feature. This is perfect because she is apart of my target audience. I like the idea that she would be willing to pay £4-5 for my magazine. This is effective because I aim for my magazine to look simple yet expensive.
DeleteFrom Emily's post I have learnt that I needed to add more artist which appeal to a wider audience in order to get her attention.
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ReplyDeleteI like the colour scheme of your presentation and the fact that it is the first thing that I notice will most certainly also attract your chosen audience. Also, the photos that go along with your chosen words give me an insight into what you want to create for your magazine. I would pay £3.50 for your magazine. To improve, include a few music artists relating to your genre.
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